Sorry dude
Not feelin' it. Work on your animation skills, example, the walking..... Nobody wants to see a guy that just goes from side to side and is "walking". The story line makes no sense..... No try again with a different everything, keep you animation STYLE, not the way you animate mind you, but the way you design your characters, that was a pretty good design, just work on it a little bit, and build up your skill.